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Awsome! You have my heart in your hand, a deep joy went through me.
You gift is so smooth many would take you weak yet, I only see loving strenght to move forward and survive. Always a pleasure.
posted by
Mystereo
on December 13, 2008 at 7:32 PM
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Beautiful.
posted by
Fledgeling_Phoenix
on November 22, 2008 at 8:40 PM
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A truly superb piece my dear Jen
I have absolute faith you will get through whatever you are currently experiencing; many blessings and thanks my friend
posted by
mariaki
on November 19, 2008 at 6:40 AM
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just stopping by enjoying your excellent work as always,
hope whatever your going through you survive, best wishes
posted by
Samantha39
on November 19, 2008 at 6:10 AM
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This is so beautifully human. It feels so balanced with truth. ~Peace, OTA
posted by
Blue_feathers
on November 19, 2008 at 3:14 AM
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WOW....Jen this is such a grand work....I stand in awe before you...This is just wonderful...I am speechless...
posted by
Wigopa_
on November 18, 2008 at 9:57 PM
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Dear sweet Mermaid :-) How I enjoy your writings... its so strong and definite...so sweet and tender at the same time. Its your gift, that duality, soft and hard at the same time. Bravo! I am so happy you are posting on a regurlar basis again I missed you!
posted by
Sinome
on November 18, 2008 at 8:37 PM
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Really liked your 1st stanza(for me that would be lines 1-13; COLD/FORETOLD) and how that was set up with clanging words: tainted moon, crying the crime..evinced (to be foretold?)...and I'm thinking, "oh there's a story being told here" when I'm wisked out to sea with the next run-on sentence (Hey, where am I? Was this the yesterday I was just in or the tommorow that just began? If I didn't know where I was, I'd probably be lost.
So, here I am swimming around, trying to latch onto a couple of imbedded words that might make a thought--just so I can pretend to know where i am (which is what I do in my real world anyway. So what's the diff? I'm up for a new experience).
Now, none of this means I'm lost, because that would mean I don't know where I am, when I know I'm within poem that happenes to take me, perhaps, into another dimension. Of course this doesn't mean I'm not already looking around for my little red shoes, because in the back of our minds we really don't want to loose our GSP to home.
To start summing up: (Oh, thank god; we can acutally start getting to the end of this). My feeling is that you are not a poet per se (tho this is is one or your talents and chosen medium). But I sense beyond/within much more, and this the archetype of an artist who will announce new forms.
posted by
jfm32
on November 18, 2008 at 5:27 PM
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To be together with ...
... our own burden and admit it, whatever the burden is, is to being into it's own healing process - a beautiful, sad but, also strong poem - 
- genio
posted by
ggXpress
on November 18, 2008 at 3:52 PM
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hope
your poetry is always filled with hope, an emotion that is usually overlooked
posted by
Luz_Briar
on November 18, 2008 at 3:45 PM
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So happy I could read you this time (the pic wasn't too big!). Beautifully written and so true.
posted by
auslander
on November 18, 2008 at 1:00 PM
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Beautifully worded optimism...
...in the face of deep loss. Only time can bring about such healing, but, healing does eventually come.
Excellent work, Jen.
posted by
metalrat
on November 18, 2008 at 11:35 AM
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So beautiful, I have missed your poems :)
posted by
Lotus_Flower
on November 18, 2008 at 8:58 AM
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Stunning work, PM! And most hopefully so..
posted by
Katray2
on November 18, 2008 at 8:24 AM
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