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Intriguing subject... doubt. Stirred me up, but in the end confident certainty prevailed

in a triumphant song.

posted by yellowrose55 on November 16, 2008 at 5:22 AM | link to this | reply

your lyric imagery works for me

i also love your rhyme scheme

posted by muley12 on November 15, 2008 at 1:11 PM | link to this | reply

Sam-this is a brilliant piece! DOUBT is overpowering-imprisoning as I know-

you  know! In doubt-we can not move forward or re-trace--we are 'frozen in time'! I love this.Chris.

posted by Scramble on November 15, 2008 at 8:10 AM | link to this | reply

Sammy if that was messing around  I can not imagine what you write when you get serious darling'... Amazing stuff!!!  very self revealing and touching at times.  Loved it!

posted by Sinome on November 15, 2008 at 7:32 AM | link to this | reply

And very good lyrics I might add.

 Very true, and a very good question.

                         

posted by Kolekshuns on November 14, 2008 at 11:30 PM | link to this | reply

fantastic...I agree.

posted by banzonvilla on November 14, 2008 at 9:21 PM | link to this | reply

doubt is a hard thing to get over

posted by lustorlove on November 14, 2008 at 9:04 PM | link to this | reply

sam444

Well done, very different and imaginative luv

posted by WileyJohn on November 14, 2008 at 8:21 PM | link to this | reply

You sing well acappella!.. I am listening.

posted by merkie on November 14, 2008 at 8:05 PM | link to this | reply

sam, you sure hit the nail on the head in your imagery of doubt..

we think we've got it under control and in it sneaks yet again, if we allow it too.....

posted by Rumor on November 14, 2008 at 7:57 PM | link to this | reply

Just messing around?...humnn. Probably so, because after you touched the feeling/thought, you started analyzing it, which becomes part of another package.

I thought your 1st stanza caught it, and I started wondering why you felt you needed to wtite the 2nd part, and I started woundering, for myself, the age old question of substance and delivery: Is more, more, or is less more? EG: does thought require its own action to be recorded of what it has already perceived?

So, you kind of led me to this fork road of self-discovery and the batterment of form--I never wanted to know everything, but I always liked the light bulb of a thought because it would be like a little gem (or crayon)I could put in my pocket and walk around feeling happy for one day.

So, all I'm saying I was happier than a pig in your 1st stanza--then you continued telling me what this was about to you--without being universal to me, so I just lost interest, and just got lost, till you told me you're just messing around, not with me, but your own thought.

This is a back door to a more interesting question. Like I said, Maestro, you can't play it if you don't hear it. But you can't hear it until you try to play it.

So, quote me: I think I hear more in you than you might be hearing in yourself, right now. Of course I'm a gambler, so prove me wrong!

posted by jfm32 on November 14, 2008 at 7:50 PM | link to this | reply

Great stuff.  Doubt definitely is a tyrant! 

posted by TAPS. on November 14, 2008 at 6:44 PM | link to this | reply

I love this!

"...and then becomes scrambled by doubt, without song"so true!  Then comes singing accappella!!

posted by KaBooM62 on November 14, 2008 at 6:02 PM | link to this | reply

i thought it was beautiful  doubt does get the upperhand too often

posted by Luz_Briar on November 14, 2008 at 3:53 PM | link to this | reply

Not bad for messing...

posted by _teddypoet_ on November 14, 2008 at 2:33 PM | link to this | reply