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Haha... I don't know about a merman... a mermaid maybe... either way, thank you very much for you commentary. I take all insights seriously and I appreciate your words.
posted by
Rayvin
on August 7, 2008 at 10:58 AM
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Terrific! I understand your passion! Ha maybe bloggers will call you Purple Merman. In any event I feel that your poem expresses emotion. It uses the senses. In other words you write with a technique of poets. With TLC, BCA,
“Top of the Stairs”
posted by
BC-A
on August 7, 2008 at 8:53 AM
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Re: So passionate! Hence all the purple?
I used purple for a couple of reasons... One: it's my favorite color and Two: I've always thought of purple as the color of passion. I apologize if it's hard to read and I assure you that I did not intend for any harm to befall your vision, haha.
As for my lines, well, I write each poem in the manner it appears to me. However it comes to mind is how I write it down. I've never been one for rules either and I would like to think that my poetry reflects how it would be to have an everyday conversation with myself... does that make sense? Haha
Thank you for the welcome! I intend to learn as many new appraches to my work as well as get aquainted with other talented writers such as yourself 
posted by
Rayvin
on August 6, 2008 at 11:37 PM
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So passionate! Hence all the purple?
One thing about the purple: especially in a small font, very hard for my aging eyes to see!
This piece brings up the matter of line-breaks. I'm wondering why you decided to draw out the lines so long. Not a criticism--assuming you have creative intent in how you designed this.
Me, I go by instinct and inspiration instead of by rules, and only get bogged down by too much intellectualizing of my process.
In fact, I don't know much about poetics, but this is one area I have taken an interest in because I write a lot of free verse. The general rule of thumb is that long lines give a piece a more mellow, relaxed or dreamy feel; short lines give more impact and power. It's how the reader's mind perceives.
Anyway, welcome to Blogit! I hope you have fun here, make some friends and good experiences!
posted by
Ciel
on August 6, 2008 at 6:46 PM
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Wow!
posted by
Star5_
on August 3, 2008 at 4:41 PM
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I hope you DO come back and read my work as often as you'd like.
posted by
Rayvin
on August 3, 2008 at 4:39 PM
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I would hope so... if not... then my imagination is better than I thought... haha
posted by
Rayvin
on August 3, 2008 at 4:38 PM
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Passionate indeed, That fire you speak of so eloquently is one many willingly burn in... you are very talented, I will be back to read you again. Thank you for this beautiful poem
posted by
Sinome
on August 2, 2008 at 9:29 PM
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Apparently you know TLC, so lol, BCA, “Top of the Stairs”
posted by
BC-A
on August 2, 2008 at 5:28 AM
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Quite passionate!
posted by
Afzal_Sunny7
on August 1, 2008 at 8:35 PM
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WOW ... to love like that makes me realize
I will miss the one I love forever ...
Beautifully written too! :)
posted by
AnaEmiliaMarina
on August 1, 2008 at 5:09 PM
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