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And the light was received
May you be safe over there
posted by
Smittenheimer
on July 17, 2008 at 12:42 PM
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Very good piece
powerful and poignant - I agree with NiteTide on the repetition, very nicely done.
posted by
lionreign
on July 16, 2008 at 3:39 AM
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I just wanted to assure you all...
That I'm okay. I wrote this almost 10 years ago while in college at the end of a bitter relationship. I'm glad that it has spoken to or been timely to some. I'm glad that an experience I've had has had some meaning for others. Fear not! There is light at the end of the tunnel... - Chris
posted by
Marineair
on July 16, 2008 at 3:11 AM
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I can't believe how timely this piece is my friend!
You have just described my current circumstances superbly! Seen in black and white you have renewed my perspective for which I thank you profusely; excellent work; thank you and God bless
posted by
mariaki
on July 16, 2008 at 1:45 AM
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good poetry
i liked this one alot, i think its a sign of your style finding itself - keep it up and let's see where it takes you
posted by
Jack_Shackleton
on July 15, 2008 at 9:57 PM
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Very grave doubts! All will be well!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on July 15, 2008 at 4:10 PM
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Wow....this is highly profound! I loved the repetition in the poem...which made every stanza become more powerful, like the rush of a wave as it crashes to the ground in a powerful force. That's how I felt when I read this: every repetition added to the force of the poem until it washed me...Excellent.
posted by
NiteTide
on July 15, 2008 at 3:55 PM
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