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Pat

I would go with Cherie's method of retribution Pat.  That was when I instinctively crossed my legs and winced.   Oddly enough, I had a dream last night of killing someone with a thousand cuts; the dream consisted of figuring out how to do it without cutting myself and how to keep the victim motionless so that they wouldn't know they were in a cocoon of razors until they woke up - and there isn't a perv along this street....that I know of.

posted by johnmacnab on June 29, 2008 at 5:28 AM | link to this | reply

Pat

Please, don't ever stop writing!

posted by Sira890 on June 28, 2008 at 10:52 AM | link to this | reply

Re: WileyJohn

I applaud you, John, and am sorry that it damaged your relationship with your sons.  I personally think you did the right thing, and whoever prevented you from explaining yourself to your children was wrong.  Kids need to know that such pervsion exists, or they won't know how to protect themselves.  And it is soooo pervasive....I've been confronted by at least seven in my own lifetime....Unfortunately all when I was too young and too small to cause much damage.   I got real good at memorizing license plate numbers, though. :)

posted by CharlieMine on June 24, 2008 at 7:44 AM | link to this | reply

Pat

This is just a brilliant piece! And indeed with subtleties below the surface one could write about at length - but you are probably aware of them...

posted by Nautikos on June 24, 2008 at 4:27 AM | link to this | reply

Pat, OMG This is brilliant

You horrified me with this writing. It's so good I felt myself there sitting on a porch swinging away in a squeaky old swing and smiling towards a neighbor across the street, thinking what  a nice family lives there!!!!!!

posted by Kabu on June 23, 2008 at 3:37 PM | link to this | reply

You know Pat I could smell the freshness of the writing

It's that good, and yet imagine, the fun you can have polishing it

posted by Azur on June 23, 2008 at 3:30 PM | link to this | reply

PatB

This is so well written, I think I have to get away and watch TV to get my mind off it.

My ex FIL was a molester/abuser and that's the second time in my life when I nearly went away for a long time after I worked him over.

Strange, I lost the relationship with my 2 sons because I nearly killed their maternal grandfather and couldn't explain the why of it to them. I just made sure that dickhead knew what would happen to him if something happened to my children.

You did a superb job of writing about such emotional filth my friend.

posted by WileyJohn on June 23, 2008 at 2:53 PM | link to this | reply

Pat_B, only you could tell that old, old story in such a way.  There have always been pervs and there have always been innocents whose innocence has been destroyed, and there have always been parents who lust for justice, for revenge.  But you brought it alive and personal in a quiet and peaceful community, on a day in June 2008.

posted by TAPS. on June 23, 2008 at 9:13 AM | link to this | reply

Just so you know, I wrote this only a few minutes before posting it.

It's probably going to be edited some, but I think the story's pretty much told.

posted by Pat_B on June 23, 2008 at 8:33 AM | link to this | reply

~Peace, OTA

posted by OTA. on June 23, 2008 at 8:25 AM | link to this | reply

OH, this is sweet!

Masterful!  I love how you brought the husband and wife together, thinking the same thing, neither one feeling they could tell the other.  My spouse knows full well what would happen if anyone threatened our kids, and agrees that it would be worth the cost.  Not just revenge, but prevention....  We have a duty to protect our children, no?

posted by CharlieMine on June 23, 2008 at 8:06 AM | link to this | reply