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9STAR
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May 7, 2008
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so sweet
well done!
posted by
NighthawkNY
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May 6, 2008
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Beautiful ! WEll said !
posted by
afzal50
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May 6, 2008
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Such an incredible aspiration! So outstanding! sam
posted by
sam444
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May 6, 2008
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Imagery come-to-life!
posted by
Kolekshuns
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May 6, 2008
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Self-less love...
on the lighter side, Sinome, at this rate every man might wanna be your ex-lover :)! - Ash
posted by
ash_pradhan
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May 6, 2008
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Beautiful..Stunning imagery...Great post!
posted by
Wigopa_
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May 5, 2008
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Beautiful
a lot of thought and care obviously went into this one.
posted by
Loribeth215
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May 5, 2008
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If you could, would you?????
posted by
9STAR
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May 5, 2008
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Why do I always get this sense that there is more meaning in your writing than what seems to appear? In this one, the "as if-ness" would seem to be impossible. But is it? While there seems to be no juxtaposition with current reality (oh, is that hidden?), it goes on as if to exhaust itself with enumeration..."if I could love you, let me count the ways"...as if there were such a reality in the abscence of our existential experience. Now, there's the rub--and what's not said or even implied. Therefore the opposite: Everything you said could also be immanent--though we're not going to get it all at once, because that's why we have Time. Thus your enumeration (for lack of a better term--wish list) is what we might already have, and might not have been aware we were already experiencing. Sometimes you just got to listen to an empty drum.
Anyway, I guess I might as well start apologizing, because I relly didn't mean to confuse myself.
John
posted by
jfm32
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May 5, 2008
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Sinome
To even be able to fantasize such selfless love....that is special; and to write it so beautifully to share with others....maybe influence just one person to think about what truly loving another might mean.....that is really, really special....and tells me that the author is, too.
posted by
Krisles
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May 5, 2008
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One of your best poems. Great work.
posted by
Kolekshuns
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May 5, 2008
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Simone, a beautiful poetic ecstasy of an unselfish utopia
that exists in your love poem, love.
posted by
BC-A
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May 5, 2008
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A wonderous thing to contemplate, Sinome.
And I know you would do it too, if you could. You're that kind of person. Lovely poem, as usual.
posted by
metalrat
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May 5, 2008
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Absolutely Lovely
posted by
dpaulinomorris24
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May 5, 2008
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you are so blessedly tender Sinome ~ this poem just touches my heart to its core ~
~Elyse
posted by
elysianfields
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May 5, 2008
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sacrifice
that is what if feel in this poem... ultimate sacrifice.
posted by
bluebossa
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May 5, 2008
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"
where cat's claws stayed always curled
and your thoughts would all be sweet."
Love these lines.
posted by
jmh256
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May 5, 2008
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i have no doubt you would my beloved one...you have such a kind heart my dear...it's all over your heartfelt pieces...
posted by
__Purple_Mermaid11__
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May 5, 2008
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A very possible dream!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
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May 5, 2008
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wow! only if right. good writing. thanks for sharing
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meeks2
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May 5, 2008
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