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"Schizophrenic landscape of LA" I love it! Reading you revs me up for my own writing, to make it the best it can be! Thanks Halfeleven!!
posted by
KaBooM62
on April 10, 2008 at 6:15 PM
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I still think...
here the author is intruding into what are essentially Connie's reflections, and Connie wouldn't know a 'dysfunction' if it bit her on her undoubtedly shapely bum - but hey, the author is God, or Goddess, in this case...
posted by
Nautikos
on April 10, 2008 at 5:28 PM
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Re: I enjoy this hugely!
I did look at the phrasing on "dysfunction". That was narrative, not a quoted thought, so I think I'll leave it the way I wrote it. But thanks for making me look. :)
posted by
Halfelven
on April 8, 2008 at 6:56 PM
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This is really cool!
I'll be waiting for the next chapter!
posted by
strat
on April 8, 2008 at 5:40 PM
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Excellent work!
posted by
teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade
on April 8, 2008 at 2:37 PM
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"Cute"
Cute was irony. :)
I'll check about my phrasing on dysfunction but I've actually heard people make similar remarks. Thanks.
posted by
Halfelven
on April 8, 2008 at 8:56 AM
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I enjoy this hugely!
Two trivial points: There is no such thing as a 'cute little Cadillac SUV', there are only big and rather silly ones, and I don't think Connie would think in terms of 'a history of dysfunction' when thinking of her own life or the lives of the other denizens of the Vegas bar scene...
posted by
Nautikos
on April 8, 2008 at 4:14 AM
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thank you for the entertaining story dear...
posted by
__Purple_Mermaid11__
on April 7, 2008 at 10:30 PM
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