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I could sense the suicidal note when seen and conversed with inner struggle, symbolized by the 'mirror'. Also it veers on hope, but the sudden change of direction is conveyed in the last line "she doesn't notice anymore, now she's blind", left me absolutely astounded. So telling in its beauty of the story of man. You're fanatastic Avi.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 7, 2008 at 8:42 AM | link to this | reply

At first very sad
but then a glimmer of hope.  A well crafted poem!

posted by Troosha on March 7, 2008 at 8:11 AM | link to this | reply

wow...

She had so much promise, so much ambition,
but no one was there, there was no recognition,
that's all she ever wanted, someone to relate,
to say that they loved her, even that they hate,

yes... yes...you took my heart

posted by star4sky5 on March 6, 2008 at 8:07 PM | link to this | reply

sublime to say the least.

posted by thecryptkeeper on March 6, 2008 at 11:40 AM | link to this | reply

Excellent!
 gothic melancholy

posted by BC-A on March 5, 2008 at 2:57 PM | link to this | reply

This is beautifully constructed, a joy to read!

posted by Soul_Builder101 on March 5, 2008 at 11:33 AM | link to this | reply

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