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Awesome, my friend!  sam

posted by sam444 on January 13, 2008 at 6:25 PM | link to this | reply

posted by afzal50 on January 13, 2008 at 5:19 PM | link to this | reply

laydi daydi:

Thanks for you explanation. Somehow I miscounted the syllables in your "Roots of erosion...." I apologize.

 

 

posted by EX_TURPI on January 13, 2008 at 4:01 PM | link to this | reply

Re: Sue, where on radio dial? EX-TURPI&ASH, syllables r NOT words but SOUNDS

Thanx, I get it..I'll give it a shot sometime..perhaps you & Chris can help out ? - Ash

posted by ash_pradhan on January 13, 2008 at 3:39 PM | link to this | reply

Sue, where on radio dial? EX-TURPI&ASH, syllables r NOT words but SOUNDS

Let me give an example. Apologies if this is too simple and basic; although accents and dialects can change the syllable count (aluminum versus aluminium, fire&higher&sire are pronounced as one syllable in the west and two in Scotland and in the other countries).

BAD AND QUICK HAIKU SAMPLE:
evening comes softly

silence glows from miles around

fireflies and glow-worms

(c)Neil Deonils, 1-13-2008

 

EXPLANATION of SYLLABLE COUNTS: 5,7,5

LINE 1 (5 seprate sounds): evening comes softly

evening is TWO sounds in most accents; comes is ONE; soft-ly has TWO syllables

LINE 2 (7 syllables): si-lence (2) + glows (1) + from (1) + Miles (1) + a-round (2)

LINE 3 (5 syllables): fire-flies (2) + and (1) + glow-worms (2)

posted by salem8 on January 13, 2008 at 3:25 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks. I did not get your 5-7-5. I will read it over again. Thanks very much.

posted by EX_TURPI on January 13, 2008 at 2:46 PM | link to this | reply

Terrific..thanks for the explanation..I for one is one

of the novices who didn't know..btw, could you please break down the syllables for me in one of them..just wanna make sure I get it, thanks bro - Ash

posted by ash_pradhan on January 13, 2008 at 1:52 PM | link to this | reply

laydi.....

tune ur radio to our station here........there's a nice thing to listen...

posted by star4sky5 on January 13, 2008 at 12:52 PM | link to this | reply

Hey SoulBuilder Dave- great to see you.Enjoying time off from blogging I C

http://www.bonsaichat.org/forums/photopost/data/510/Bonsai_Kai_022.jpg

posted by salem8 on January 13, 2008 at 12:49 PM | link to this | reply

I was aware of 5-7-5 but hardly saw it here. Your post makes it more meaningful!!!!!

posted by Soul_Builder101 on January 13, 2008 at 12:45 PM | link to this | reply

thank you so much for your wonderful commints and spelling corections never was to good at spelling. those bonzia are cool. I read your about me page. no harm inteended but it is not so much that americans can't take the truth it is our government that is scared of what we as a people will do with the truth on a majoraty. I my self am aware of the truth and it saddens me that more people are not. God bless and thanks

posted by spinner on January 13, 2008 at 12:15 PM | link to this | reply

Hello again my Bro! These are beautifull Bonsai's! And your Haiku's are

wonderfull!! I'm pleased you posted true Haiku work-because I had almost forgotten that I started with the true--then took another pathway--and everything became personal! I will try to return to the true! Thank you my friend and Shalom-from Chris.

posted by Scramble on January 13, 2008 at 12:03 PM | link to this | reply