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Re: Such original use of language
thanks John (sorry that i was calling you Jim, I don't know how that happened), but your comments are greatly appreciated, I know what you mean about the musical thing because structuring words across melodic and rhythmical landscapes is what I enjoy - I haven't got back to you about your first P game comments yet in respect to trimming unnecessary words, I agree with you completely on that, but I find myself sometimes adding them in because of an incremental rhythmical nuance that feels nicer to say, and saying (as opposed to reading), is closer to singing which itself is quite liberal when it comes grammatical logic (in the poetic sense) - and this brings it closer to jazz with its emphasis on the nuances of syncopation - now if only i could write like that - what a buzz!
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chrisja
on November 16, 2007 at 3:13 PM
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Such original use of language
Your poems both startle and amaze me. I love surprises, and I get them throughout with every twist and turn. As I started, wasn't sure where I was. But as soon as I read "the Sun wore woolen overalls" I knew I was in for a real treat. I soon realized I wasn't so much in a poem as I was in a musical piece, which is why the turn/thrust of a word so thrills me. My feeling here seemed to be confirmed by your use of chorus's. Especially liked "We all love African Music" and how you used old big band blues riff (back to Basie?). What thrilled me the most is I wasn't reading a poem. I was listening to player.
John (JFM, not JIM svp)
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jfm32
on November 16, 2007 at 1:17 PM
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on November 13, 2007 at 9:28 PM
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on November 13, 2007 at 6:36 PM
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