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I really do feel I 'KNOW' your writing! Very sad but so well written! Chris
posted by
Scramble
on August 23, 2007 at 12:58 PM
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Excellent rhythm - looks great, too.
posted by
Antonionioni
on August 22, 2007 at 5:07 AM
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Powerful and heartbreaking verse..
posted by
Katray2
on August 21, 2007 at 9:32 PM
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It's sad but well-written .
posted by
afzal50
on August 21, 2007 at 7:56 PM
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It's almost pretty (in a way).
The first, um, paragraph (Sorry, I don't know the official poetry terminology) kinda sounds like me in my first week of rehab, actually.
Love can sweep you off your feet,
and carry you along
in a way you've never known before.
But the ride always ends,
and you end up feeling lonely and bitter.
Wait. It's not love I'm describing.
I'm thinking of a monorail.
posted by
Mademoiselle
on August 21, 2007 at 7:52 PM
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Excellent!
posted by
Afzal_Sunny7
on August 21, 2007 at 7:48 PM
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