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Re: Chilitree & Antonionioni
Thank you for your positive comments - what a nice way to start the week
posted by
OneBetty
on August 20, 2007 at 10:18 AM
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Re: Deuteronomy 4:31
cpklapper - thank you for checking out my blog and I appreciate you taking the time to provide these scriptures!!
posted by
OneBetty
on August 20, 2007 at 10:13 AM
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Re: Re: Re: Re: Soul Builder
WOW...Soul Builder, thank you for such an encouraging compliment!! And so, I write........
posted by
OneBetty
on August 20, 2007 at 10:10 AM
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Re: Re: Re: Soul Builder
Keep going girl... you are too intelligent, not to!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on August 17, 2007 at 10:14 PM
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Deuteronomy 4:31
(For the LORD thy God is a merciful God;) he will not forsake thee, neither destroy thee, nor forget the covenant of thy fathers which he sware unto them.
and
Hebrews 13:5
Let your conversation be without covetousness; and be content with such things as ye have: for he hath said, I will never leave thee, nor forsake thee.
posted by
cpklapper
on August 17, 2007 at 9:02 PM
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Re: Re: Soul Builder
"truth" and "proof" form a near-rhyme, in light of the assonance ("oo" sound in both) and the related "th" and "f", both soft, aspirated consonants though one is dental and the other fricative.
One use of near-rhymes, as of complex rhyme schemes and interior rhymes, is to mute the obviousness of the rhyme, which often distracts the reader from the message by making every couplet of equal importance or, often, annoyance. By contrast, the ending couplet in the Shakespearian sonnet drives home the message for which the three previous quatrains lay the groundwork.
Carl Peter
posted by
cpklapper
on August 17, 2007 at 8:46 PM
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I love this one....very true!
posted by
Chilitree
on August 14, 2007 at 10:34 PM
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Re: Lovely poem, OneBetty - very well-said.
Hi Antonionioni - thanks so much
. Make today a good one.
posted by
OneBetty
on August 14, 2007 at 10:31 AM
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Re: Re: Re: productive exchange - communication is the key:)
Hi there fuinc - so glad we had this chat. That's the beauty of a forum that gives us all an opportunity to write, read, share and learn. Getting caught up in "a moment" is often the beginning of stellar writing endeavors. Thank you for your quick response and, since you caught my attention (under statement), I will certainly be looking forward to reading your work going forward. I hope to see you back, as well...........inside or outside "your moments!"
posted by
OneBetty
on August 14, 2007 at 10:11 AM
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Re: Julia
Morning Julia - great way to start my day. Your feedback is highly encouraging, given your talent and accomplishments as a writer! Thank you, thank you - confidence is what it will take for me head down my professional dream path of all time...the one where I find me, "the writer," at the end of the rainbow - to me, THAT would trump even the biggest pot of gold
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Make today a good one.
posted by
OneBetty
on August 14, 2007 at 9:51 AM
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Lovely poem, OneBetty - very well-said.
posted by
Antonionioni
on August 14, 2007 at 2:42 AM
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Re: Re: fuinc
I may be wrong, or just misunderstood. PS 27:9 "Do not forsake me and do not leave me, O my god of salvation". It was not my intention to be rude or discramatory in any way I too dont have much education or expirance in writing or much else for that matter. your poem did provoke thought and definitly emotion which to me is what it's all about so well done, sorry i got caught up in the moment.
posted by
fuinc
on August 13, 2007 at 9:56 PM
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Re: spinner
Hi spinner - thanks so much for the acknowledgement. I haven't seen your work yet, but I'm anxious to visit your blog! Until we meet again
posted by
OneBetty
on August 13, 2007 at 9:54 PM
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one betty--
hey, I'm not really a poetry expert but I thought this was nicely expressed. And I don't even know what fuinic (oops for got how to spell it already, LOL) was trying to say in that comment! ;-)
posted by
Julia.
on August 13, 2007 at 9:31 PM
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Re: Soul Builder
Hi Soul Builder - thank you for your feedback. So, my use of truth & proof is technically a poetry violation? Sincere question, since I have no formal writing education beyond basic high school English. I'm sure there are many rules or etiquites I've violated in my work, but I won't know unless I learn and I can't learn without education. For that, I appreciate your FYI, as that is what I'm looking for out of this experience with Blogit. Whew....hitting home is the ultimate goal for a writer, so EXTRA thanks for your confirmation and compliment on this piece.
Hope you will continue to contribute to my "education," as someday I hope to be a published, well respected writer...........and, if that day comes, you could say, "I knew her when, I helped her then and she wouldn't made it without me!
posted by
OneBetty
on August 13, 2007 at 9:24 PM
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Re: fuinc
I have read your comment several times and would like to better understand your point. You say "I never said "I will not forsake you," was that a typo? That implies that YOU (fuinc) are God - the one I refer to as "symbolically" holding the hands of those who believe in him. Or, are you pointing out a misquote or something of that nature? Please clarify - I'll be a bit embarrassed if I have misquoted the All Mighty God...that would, well, just plain suck!
The reference to the shit hole and your obvious, overall bitterness in life, I get, I understand where you're coming from....however, since I do believe there's some form of "God," some form of "Heaven" and a "metaphorical hand," on the days I feel like saying fuck everything, I didn't ask for this kind of pain, I simply try and find comfort in my "faith." If I'm wrong, I'm wrong and I will, at the end of this life, learn what, if anything, comes next. But, if I'm right, I will have found a way to manage in this shit hole, enjoy life in the midst of it's latest bowel movement and ultimately (and the big hope I'm holding out for) will someday be reunited with a long list of loved ones that have been tragically ripped out of mine and my family's hearts throughout the years!
If you personally don't have faith beyond this earthly commode we've all been dumped in and you simply believe "this is it, then you die," I am sad for your hopelessness and do hope your world gets brighter and life reveals better times in the near future. I also hope that the loving bond with your son will prove to be enough to fill your voids, overcome your anger, settle your pain and comfort your heart.
In general, for those who do not believe that God is the creator of man and/or in any devine intervention, spiritual support or guidance - I fully respect their opinion and choice to believe or disbelieve, agree or disagree. In addition, I expect them to resiprocate respect back to me regarding the same. I was raised very religiously, but have lost respect for "organized religion," due to so much hypocrocy within the "leadership," and overall judgement on others of unlike faiths. So, although I speak spefically about God and Heaven and all, I have actually formed my hopeful opinions and beliefs from bits and pieces of life along the way. But, I try to live as a decent person who attempts to do the right thing, love much, hate none and take responsibility for my own actions in life. If my eclectic version of faith & spirituality prove to be wrong - I can't imagine there will be too much punishment for an overall, good woman of faith.
Thanks for visiting my blog - and, although your comment is void of feedback on my writing skills, I'll asume I've done a good job at conveying my thoughts clearly and achieved a writer's goal of being able to provoke thought and extract relative emotion from our readers.
Make today a good one
posted by
OneBetty
on August 13, 2007 at 9:04 PM
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sorry
sorry i got to negative for a min. I never said "I will not forsake you" and I don't remember signing anything nor did i ask to get dumped into this bowl of sh*t, sorry I feel very strongly on this matter. I live very carefully cause within a second I may not have a choice, the only one holding my hand is my son and I will never let go. I'm not trying to be an asshole just had to say something.
posted by
fuinc
on August 13, 2007 at 6:29 PM
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OneBetty
You had a little problem there with TRUTH and PROOF...no RHYME! But the message hit home all the same. Great effort!
posted by
Soul_Builder101
on August 13, 2007 at 3:42 PM
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spinner
very true god bless / spinner
posted by
spinner
on August 13, 2007 at 2:54 PM
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