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posted by A-and-B on March 30, 2007 at 3:29 PM | link to this | reply

thanks, moonspirit, TAPs...for your encouraging words...

posted by scriber on March 29, 2007 at 6:07 AM | link to this | reply

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I especially liked the last four lines.  They made me smile.

posted by TAPS. on March 28, 2007 at 8:28 PM | link to this | reply

Ah, Justi, so...thanks....

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 7:22 PM | link to this | reply

Many thanks, Moon Spirit...

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 7:21 PM | link to this | reply

Scriber

Oh such words for blues.... I can hear the rhythm too.... Nice.

posted by Justi on March 28, 2007 at 4:51 PM | link to this | reply

You are quite gifted and have a sharp mind. Peace, Brother. MoonSpirit

posted by chitravathi_moon on March 28, 2007 at 12:04 PM | link to this | reply

NAJWA--In this unfortunate man's experience, the blue birds didn't sing

often enough, like once in a blue moon.  I agree, would have been better for him, and possibly her, if the birds sang a little more often.   In his poem, it just happened to be Sunday when the first bird of spring shoose to sing.   lol and thanks...

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 9:29 AM | link to this | reply

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Ah, okay, I thought that was it, but wanted to check and make sure before I put my foot in my mouth! Exploring the, ‘seasons’ in our lives and what is acceptable via the conventions of what are considered, ‘sins’ is what I took from your poem. If we ignore what is possibly, ‘right’, and choose the other way, indeed it is feasible that our, ‘bluebird of happiness’ is false. And therefore the reactions we seek from others are false as well. And a false sense of belonging is borne. Well done. I loved this poem! –Joy!Mary 

posted by FoliageGold on March 28, 2007 at 9:27 AM | link to this | reply

Mars Gold...Thanks much for your question, which I shall attempt to answer.

        
"He were morally

ifen nor legally tied".   It would be more understandable and correct English, if I had written:   "He was morally, if not legally, tied."   The accents are on morally and legally.   My poems often contain "sound like words," colloquies and grammatical errors left there by my need for a certain rhythmetic effect.  So, "ifen" means merely "if."   The "Nor" naturally replaces "not" and has a connection to "mor" in morally.  I'm getting confused...

    

        

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 9:14 AM | link to this | reply

I LOVE THE BLUE BIRD SONG IT IS REAL AND TRUE EVERY DAY NOT ONLY SUNDAY>>>WHY SUNDAY MY FRIEND????

posted by NAJWA on March 28, 2007 at 9:04 AM | link to this | reply

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I have more comments to make, but could you please tell me what the word, 'ifer' means?  --Joy!Mary 

posted by FoliageGold on March 28, 2007 at 8:19 AM | link to this | reply

Star4you--thanks friend for visit. Bring Rock Star with you next time...

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 8:06 AM | link to this | reply

Scriber, nice to read you....

posted by star4sky5 on March 28, 2007 at 7:34 AM | link to this | reply

Mark--right, I've heard it say alligator belching turn women on...

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 5:51 AM | link to this | reply

Scriber ~ They don't really sing as much as they wilt in the heat.

But the alligators make up for it by belching incessantly, so it all works out.

posted by mark2556 on March 28, 2007 at 5:28 AM | link to this | reply

beautiful one

posted by drohan254 on March 28, 2007 at 5:13 AM | link to this | reply

beautiful one

posted by drohan254 on March 28, 2007 at 5:13 AM | link to this | reply

Good style .

posted by afzal50 on March 28, 2007 at 5:05 AM | link to this | reply

mark2556--so when do de bluebirds sing???

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 4:57 AM | link to this | reply

OTA--many thanks, and likewise...

posted by scriber on March 28, 2007 at 4:56 AM | link to this | reply

And THAT's why I live where there are only two seasons.

Tourist and Hot.

posted by mark2556 on March 28, 2007 at 4:54 AM | link to this | reply

Scriber

I love the way you write.

posted by OTA. on March 28, 2007 at 4:41 AM | link to this | reply