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YPunday

I don't know why.....I am no expert.....but I do think it is a sonnet.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on March 13, 2007 at 6:26 AM | link to this | reply

Ypunday

Yes I'd say it follows all the right conventions - good metre and rhyme, and a self-contained idea worked to conclusion - great! Good thoughts too..

posted by mneme on March 13, 2007 at 1:30 AM | link to this | reply

YPunday

I don't know why, but your post did not show for me, only the title and the comments page.  That happened to me with one of Justi's posts also.  I'm not quite sure what is going on.  I do like your second part of your sonnet on the comments page very much.  I wish I could see the original post.

posted by TAPS. on March 11, 2007 at 7:16 AM | link to this | reply

Close enough for modern purposes

Your poem follows the Shakespearian rhyme scheme, though with some near rhymes, but its meter is much looser.  There is the resolution in the ending couplet, also.  An interesting effort and theme, all-in-all.

Carl Peter

posted by cpklapper on March 10, 2007 at 8:57 PM | link to this | reply

Excellent, Neil- cannot disagree.

And now, my emoticon of choice..........................

posted by Antonionioni on March 10, 2007 at 1:08 PM | link to this | reply

Hallo Neil.

posted by Scramble on March 10, 2007 at 12:51 PM | link to this | reply

posted by shelly_b on March 10, 2007 at 7:58 AM | link to this | reply

YPunday,

posted by richinstore on March 10, 2007 at 7:34 AM | link to this | reply

Ypunday... so very well defined!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"While TIME is but a thread for SUFFERING

To weave humanity, not box meaning"

posted by OTA. on March 10, 2007 at 7:19 AM | link to this | reply

You outdid me OneTimeAgain (my dear Bloggist Rhonda) --here it comes

QUESTIONS

 

There are pat answers, sometimes, trite ones -

Quick - approximating philosophy;

Answers with insight with these overtones:

Stale intelligence, proud humility

 

These answers with hearts that will be questioned:

Formulation, universality,

Mixed metaphors, loveless logic, reason

Intimating “us” and “them” minus “me”

 

Irreverance for a world always caught

‘tween unhealthy tradition and present

Diagnosed as anemic, at its heart, fraught

With ugly questions, powdered white comment

 

While TIME is but a thread for SUFFERING

To weave humanity, not box meaning

(c) Deo, 3-9-2007

posted by salem8 on March 10, 2007 at 7:15 AM | link to this | reply

ummmm.. more please?

posted by OTA. on March 10, 2007 at 7:06 AM | link to this | reply