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It’s hard to comment on this short addition, but I like it overall. There must be more though, right? I like that Karen is determined to meet Richard even if she has to injure herself. The dialogue though? I wish there was more. It seems a bit fast that he’s inviting her to pizza and they’ve barely spoken. More scenes of the two embarrassed, both realizing they’re staring at each other. Things like that I guess. Just thinking out loud.
posted by
SchneiderSeven
on November 23, 2006 at 1:51 PM
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