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Hi Symph

No, I don't know why you're telling me that either! Where is this holiday home, then?

Bhaskar, I will pop over after I've done my own post!

 

posted by Antonionioni on November 20, 2006 at 11:53 AM | link to this | reply

Hi Tony
As usual, a delightful post again! I read with interest you reply to Troosha, "so when I start, I have no idea how it's going to finish", and this has germinated in me an idea which I shall attempt to expand in its clarity. But this is funny, isn't it, that I'll have to then, of necessity, keep a full control on how it moves, and according to my way. It will be a well-worth challenge. Let's see. Tell me after you read my post for the day.

posted by Bhaskar.ing on November 20, 2006 at 3:57 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks for sharing...

I have lived in London all my life....I do have a holiday home in the country....and now I can't remember why I am telling you this....dammit....I have just gone braindead.

anyway....great work.

posted by _Symphony_ on November 20, 2006 at 2:53 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks everyone - mucho appreciado.

posted by Antonionioni on November 19, 2006 at 11:48 PM | link to this | reply

Hi Marie-Claire, yep, I'm still here! How are you?

posted by Blanche. on November 19, 2006 at 8:39 PM | link to this | reply

Blanche hi if you are still here.

posted by marieclaire66 on November 19, 2006 at 8:35 PM | link to this | reply

Tony.
I took my first trip to England in 1997, i remember old Maggie and Reagan being in power. (The punk era had just started). My English was tentative in those days.

posted by marieclaire66 on November 19, 2006 at 8:35 PM | link to this | reply

Tony, any pictures of me in 1976 are classified, and highly confidential.

posted by Blanche. on November 19, 2006 at 8:32 PM | link to this | reply

A world away from mine but it gives us an insight into your world...
Interesting.

posted by marieclaire66 on November 19, 2006 at 8:32 PM | link to this | reply

Very polished item, your sonnet...nice.

posted by Dreaming_Casanova on November 19, 2006 at 4:45 PM | link to this | reply

Sir Sonneteer, it's now at, "COME FOR YOUR DAILYY BREAD...."
Take care; any news about Lionladroar Mike? Shalom

posted by ILLUMINATI8 on November 19, 2006 at 4:28 PM | link to this | reply

Yes, Y
If I can find it. Is it on your site or do you want to email it?

posted by Antonionioni on November 19, 2006 at 4:25 PM | link to this | reply

Gr8 way to summarize recent history-I may borrow it for my students.Again U
inspire me to bring out my longer peoms. I just submitted one about Summer04-Winter06 to an Anthology in Maryland; and I will read on December 1st for an hour but jointly with a Baltimore publisher-poet. Blogit is a great place for feedback--before my shows hits the road, Tony. Will you look at my Winter06 poem, later?

posted by ILLUMINATI8 on November 19, 2006 at 4:10 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks Mason! Hi Troosha!
Well, you're right, I do often use the ending to refer back to the beginning - that's entirely my choice, not obligatory. It's a matter of personal taste. It's a bit like the way they tell you to write a news article or advertising pitch - make a jokey intro of some kind, add the rest, and then close by bringing back the initial 'hook'. I don't always do it, though; only if I can. If it ends seeming like it's ended too soon, then maybe that is a weakness. They ending can be abrupt, and often contains a sudden last kick, but it should seem complete rather than unfinished. The style and content are entirely my own. I just use the rhyming scheme and overall length of lines and poem as a whole. I don't agonise about whether the three sets of four lines are self-contained; often in my sonnets, they run into each other. There's supposed to be a turning point about halfway through. It doesn't bother me if there is or there isn't. But usually, having said that, they do turn, as many non-sonnets do, from talking about one particular thing, to thoughts more general, that are inspired by that starting point. I read about poetry recently that it is about letting the mind flow more quickly and unrestricted than in prose, so when I start, I have no idea how it's going to finish. It's all the inspiration of the moment, guided by the words and rhymes already put down. These blog poems are necessarily rushed, so I could probably make them better if I had time, as all of us could, but as we're all rushed, inevitably there are loose ends and slapdash lines, but the good thing is that we produce far more sketches this way than if we agonised for weeks about each one, and also we're free to hone the best ones for 'serious' poetry audiences, competitions, etc. I must get round to doing that!!

posted by Antonionioni on November 19, 2006 at 3:50 PM | link to this | reply

A wonderful sonnet about reminiscence
I tried to follow your instructions of the other day and will probably post my (clumsy) attempt tomorrow. Albeit your last couplet always relates to your earlier verse, they seem to make a harsh departure – like a band aide being pulled off quickly. Is that your style or is that the technique?

posted by Troosha on November 19, 2006 at 1:02 PM | link to this | reply

..well done! Bravo! ..yes, you've the image right on.. that was a time!

posted by MasonGarrett on November 19, 2006 at 11:52 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks to you all for popping by!

Just a quick note for Blanche, yes, I did initially think of the bicentennial theme. I nearly started with something like:

'76 was independence year...

but then thought that it was not really all that relevant to me at the time itself. The next year, '77, was our equivalent - the Queen's Silver Jubilee celebrations. Street parties and the like. If stuck for other ideas, i may do a poem about that year tomorrow - you have been warned! Yes, and fashions - we should all post our 70s pictures up. I can't on my cheap site, thank goodness!

posted by Antonionioni on November 19, 2006 at 11:33 AM | link to this | reply

Tony Hi, got to go, will read later.

posted by marieclaire66 on November 19, 2006 at 10:13 AM | link to this | reply

BRAVO
If I didn't know better I say you were an English Tax collector...  Really good poem.

posted by FARSAILOR on November 19, 2006 at 10:08 AM | link to this | reply

76 has a different meaning for us on this side of the pond, Tony, lol

76 trombones, 1776-1976 the bicentennial, lots of flags as I recall, Pinball Wizard and Elton John's Yellow Brick Road (maybe?), isn't it funny we "liberate" ourselves from Mad King George III, only to enslave ourselves to George again, after Reagan played Bedtime for Bonzo, and Margaret Thatcher was the worst of men.

I was a sophomore in high school, the styles were outrageous: crushed purpole velvet hot pants, micromini dresses too short to breathe, or maxi dresses with boots, granny dresses, all that silliness, but so much more naive then.  What happened to make everyone so jaded so quickly?

 

posted by Blanche. on November 19, 2006 at 9:19 AM | link to this | reply

Nice poem.

posted by afzal50 on November 19, 2006 at 8:36 AM | link to this | reply