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"Nice poem except I think that the next to last stanza needs..."
Thank you for the constructive criticism. I went back to attempt to rewrite the stanza to correct the meter, but I found that it flows quite well in musical form (it was written as a song). A lot of my poetry is like that in the sense that it flows better when recited with the tune for which it was written. Too bad that doesn't translate correctly into written form. :-(
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posted by
Kevin_Lauer
on November 28, 2006 at 7:57 AM
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Kevin_Lauer...
I enjoyed reading your poem a lot.
posted by
jacentaOld
on November 20, 2006 at 8:54 PM
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Nice poem except I think that the next to last stanza needs
a bit of work on its meter. Some lines are too short, I guess. It held together quite well up until that point.
posted by
WindTapper
on October 11, 2006 at 12:18 AM
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Another brilliant piece.
posted by
Lucinda_Price
on October 9, 2006 at 8:53 AM
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Kevin
Very nice wat to decribe the crops the work of the men and the feast good post 
posted by
Kat02
on October 8, 2006 at 12:54 PM
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Make hay while the sun shines... something like that.
There is an air of celebration in your poem...
posted by
marieclaire66
on October 7, 2006 at 10:11 PM
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Thank you for the welcome...
...and for the tip on "Soon." I took it down just to play it safe. Thanks.
posted by
Kevin_Lauer
on October 7, 2006 at 9:33 PM
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Hi and welcome to Blogit...
We don't see much ryhming poetry anymore...I liked this though. Hope you enjoy your time around here.
posted by
Passionflower
on October 7, 2006 at 9:20 PM
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