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you are tapping in to my deepest wells...I am stuggling with the forgiveness I must find - once and for all - if I am to stay with this man. If I weigh up the last thirty years, the cost of keeping it together is great. Tomorrow I may regret this comment, but it's his birthday and he has kept the wine flowing; it gives me a bad time but he is less cranky, and I know better than to cross him in this sort of situation. Am I stupid? Or am I more saintly than I would ever think? I wish I knew. 
posted by
mneme
on August 10, 2006 at 4:49 AM
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thanks taps.
I wrote that poem in a daydream without giving it much thought. I just came out, just as it is. Not great but kind of interesting.
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 9, 2006 at 11:22 PM
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Marie-claire, This is very interesting. It makes one think.
posted by
TAPS.
on August 9, 2006 at 8:38 PM
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moon spirit, Stop, I am blushing!
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 9, 2006 at 3:29 PM
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MarieClaire, your mind is quick and clever, your poetry is lyrical. It has a very refreshing feel to it. MoonSpirit 
posted by
syzygy
on August 9, 2006 at 3:28 PM
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I did this on purpose, just for fun and emphasis, not sure if it was such a
good idea. Do you have any suggestions?
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 9, 2006 at 3:21 PM
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posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on August 9, 2006 at 2:32 PM
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This one is for all of us, too! Thanks for a really good one Marieclaire.
Loved the rhyme scheme--new for you-- and I have just one suggestion, "Check distraught distress". I don't think they go together or redundancy may be the issue here. But I have been incorrect (once, but I have never been wrong, by any solid proof). Shalom--Brava!
posted by
ILLUMINATI8
on August 9, 2006 at 2:31 PM
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MARIE, MARIE, SWEET MARIE!
You do, you will, you have, you did!
posted by
swftfox
on August 9, 2006 at 10:34 AM
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Marie
Just beautiful I felt I could relate with this poem
posted by
Kat02
on August 9, 2006 at 9:18 AM
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Lovely poem .
posted by
afzal50
on August 9, 2006 at 7:11 AM
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I particularly like the line, in an ocean of sadness.
I also like th sound of two tons of driven madness.
posted by
Hadley-Madison
on August 9, 2006 at 2:39 AM
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