Go to A COLUMN ABOUT NOTHING
- Add a comment
- Go to okay marie, I re wrote it again. Any better?
thanks for your insightful comments
Wow! You are a deep thinker and really pay attention to detail. I do so appreciate your comments. You have given me much to ponder and change. Thanks!
Joanie
posted by
poetjpb
on October 25, 2006 at 9:18 AM
| link to this | reply
Here are my final thoughts on the matter, hopes this helps or disregard
I am not quite sure what type of writing course this is, you mention poetry but in the last paragraph, you talk about composing a Writing Journal. Sorry if I missed a point here, but what exactly are you trying to teach? What aim are you trying to achieve, is this a proper poetry course, or is poetry used as means of tapping into inspiration and becoming creative in your writing.
When you mention uninspired writers, it implies that these writers have some experience in writing already but have somehow run into a dry patch, can you be a little clearer on this? Perhaps, you could mention, something like a writer who has run out of inspiration but would like to bring spark into their writing.
I personally would not want to teach writers who are totally uninspired, uninspired means unmotivated to me, if people are not motivated in the first place, then there is no place for them in your workshop.You are targeting people who have a desire to write, so by definition, they are not uninspired as such, but may have run out of inspiration. Are very clear about who you want to join your class? The wording is very important if you want to attract the right people in your course, and make it enjoyable and successful. I have advertised for French tuition before, and depending on the wording of the advert, you attract different levels and calibers.
So whether you are a beginner or a more experienced writer looking for inspiration.
I need to know if your uninspired writer is experienced or not. I am not clear on this.
I also think that people like to know what finished product, they end up with. If I were learning to play the guitar say, I would like to read in the advert, by the end of this course, you will be able to play a little tune, so I would emphasize that in the opening paragraph. It is good to tell them how you are going to achieve your aim, (teaching them poetic techniques, that’s great) but I think you forgot to mention the general aim, the thing you are trying to achieve, the end product if you like. If I was teaching woodwork, I would not just tell me, we are going to learn how to cut straight etc, I would also mention, we are going to build a lovely shelf.
You will become familiar with poetry techniques, and this will enable you to write more effectively and powerfully. You will be able to write poems more confidently.
I am not sure about the wording, but do you get what I am trying to say?
I personally would not teach poesy and prose in the same course, but then that is just me. I think that although the two overlap, the techniques differ greatly and call for different skills. I find it too confusing, it is hard to know what you are trying to achieve here. I feel as though I am demolishing your entire paragraph.
I hope this is of help to you, I am trying to sound smart or anything or put myself above you, far from it.
Let me know what you think.
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 17, 2006 at 4:07 PM
| link to this | reply
the second paragraph is fine but the first one bothers me a little...
let me look at it. will get back to you.
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 17, 2006 at 3:12 PM
| link to this | reply
umm, just thinking, technically speaking I cannot fault you... yet,
something is missing, it just does not stir me enough, you need to put more passion into your writing, my first impression is that it is a bit dry... may be it is just me because I tend to be very informal in my writing. let me take a closer look. There are a couple of grammar points, that you should check with Jazwolf, he is the expert not me, and he is actually a lot more qualified to critique than I am. I am just a fraud with a little bit of talent that I spread thinly over what little I know. so give me time to think on this one.
posted by
marieclaire66
on August 17, 2006 at 3:10 PM
| link to this | reply
Looking very good!
posted by
Whacky
on August 4, 2006 at 11:46 PM
| link to this | reply
poetjpb
posted by
WileyJohn
on August 4, 2006 at 8:30 PM
| link to this | reply