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sweet poem, thanks so much

posted by poetjpb on July 27, 2006 at 9:33 PM | link to this | reply

a poem in ten minutes, very simple but true.

well I will have to save that one and put in my post, thanks for the inspiration.

 

Little red wheel barrow

I remember you

When you were playing with my child

 

Little barrow full of sand

I can still see

Carrying sand from the pit

 

My little red wheel barrow

I have your photo

With my child standing by

 

My sweet little barrow

I won’t forget

The many hours you spent playing

 

Sweet little barrow

I still smile

When I see you with my boy

 

Little red barrow

Full of sorrow

Do you remember my child?

 

Little red barrow

Full of sorrow

will you forgive the little boy?

 

little red barrow

full of sorrow

the little boy left the sandpit

 

Little red barrow

Full of sorrow

Go meet my boy in heaven

 

He misses you

Little sweet barrow

Full of sorrow.

posted by marieclaire66 on July 22, 2006 at 2:59 AM | link to this | reply

Your poem was a good idea, I will keep it in mind.
Actually I am seldom short of ideas, come check my blog and you will see what I mean, do I sound like I am bragging? I never said I was good. Having to feed the blog machine every day is a bit of a chore at times,  but it is amazing what you can come up with when you try. Blogging forces me to write every day which can only be a good thing for my writing. I have covered just about every topic under the sun except for wheelbarrows, but I feel a poem coming, I already have a strong clear picture in my mind, it is a matter of translating it into words, other times it is a first line, and the rest of the poem seems to fall out on the page. Other times it is painful and it just does not flow. Well there you have it. This is how I work, are you a professional writer? I write in an extremely simple way, almost like a child. English is my second language but it does not bother me at all and I hardly notice it. I don't think other people pick it up either. It might be slightly different I am not sure.

posted by marieclaire66 on July 22, 2006 at 2:39 AM | link to this | reply

thanks but it isn't my original idea

I think it was Coleman Barks or Rumi or Robert Bly

gotta look it up again

posted by poetjpb on July 18, 2006 at 3:00 PM | link to this | reply

"...engage in the ecstatic moment..."... how utterly profound and wise...

posted by teddypoet_TheGoodByeFade on July 18, 2006 at 3:14 AM | link to this | reply

thanks

posted by Shams-i-Heartsong on July 15, 2006 at 12:05 PM | link to this | reply

Good Moning :)
Thanks for the welcome and stopping by to read my blog. Let me kow what what you think. I enjoyed your lesson on writing.  Great words of advice. :)

posted by ER-Nurse on July 15, 2006 at 8:09 AM | link to this | reply

hey I though men look good in uniforms

posted by poetjpb on July 14, 2006 at 6:17 PM | link to this | reply

wow... that's a lot of info! Nice job.

posted by -blackcat on July 14, 2006 at 6:15 PM | link to this | reply

This is wonderful!!!
Thank you.  I'll post the results either later this evening or tommorow when I am done whining about my husband wearing an ugly uniform LOL!

posted by bel_1965 on July 14, 2006 at 6:09 PM | link to this | reply

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