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hopeful storry. thanks

posted by nenkai04 on July 3, 2007 at 4:05 PM | link to this | reply

brettnik,

Very nice.  And eerily familiar.  It's a beautiful story.  Wow.  I could have written this, all the way up to the last part.  I haven't met the "one" yet, but I'm glad to read that it does actually happen in real life.  Thanks.  :)

posted by BlackPearl1 on July 22, 2006 at 8:55 AM | link to this | reply

fourcats

Actually, the whole story is even more romantic.  I'm writing it down for my kids.  We put the dime back under the floorboard for another set of star-crossed lovers to find...

posted by brettnik on July 18, 2006 at 2:12 PM | link to this | reply

what a romantic story! do you guys still have the dime?

posted by fourcats on July 15, 2006 at 9:53 AM | link to this | reply

posted by MandaLee on July 11, 2006 at 6:31 PM | link to this | reply

Quite a story!

posted by Avonna on July 11, 2006 at 12:25 PM | link to this | reply

Sannhet

I'm not sure that everybody wants to hear about the stupidity of a young girl.  I guess I made my share of mistakes.  Lucky for me I found the person with whom I share my life.   Thanks for your interest!

posted by brettnik on July 10, 2006 at 11:47 AM | link to this | reply

Doug

I haven't seen "Map..." but I heard it was great.  I turn 40 this year, so I'm right there with ya!  Thank you so much for your comments.

posted by brettnik on July 10, 2006 at 11:46 AM | link to this | reply

Brettnik -

Interesting, though I did get lost a bit following the characters. But I liked where you went with this. Are we going to find out more?

posted by sannhet on July 10, 2006 at 7:19 AM | link to this | reply

good to read about some passion

Your story needs more to go on to permit the reader to keep clear on which friend is which. As it stands, it seems hard to follow.

Would it make sense to add in false names if you are worried about protecting identities?

Also, a little more detail on the character of each of the principle people - how do they tend to think and view the world, etc. That way, when we meet the person again, you could even use the device of saying something like "our ever-idealistic Gary" or something like that...

But in general, I did enjoy your story alot. I'm an old guy (41) and it seems the years when so much romance was going on for me are long over.

I appreciate your writing these love adventures here online (are they auto-biographical?) and they capture the passion of life in the way that the inner feelings of the narrator are presented.

Best,
Doug

My favorite romantic movie was the 1993 "Map of the Human Heart".

Have you seen that one?

posted by bellwasright on July 10, 2006 at 7:15 AM | link to this | reply