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MarieClaire66... my comments were off.

The one you commented on is about my dad's passing away in South Africa at age 69--- young by some standards. Thanks again

posted by salem8 on June 26, 2006 at 5:48 AM | link to this | reply

Thanks MarieClaire--your comments are so perceptive

I feel I could do more for this birthday girl, but either distance or circumstances prevent me. Yet, the world is better for this young person -- and I too have become a better person because of her. Cheers! YPUN

posted by salem8 on June 26, 2006 at 5:30 AM | link to this | reply

Hidden sadness in this one

sharp contrasty statement is what strikes me. It touches me.

posted by marieclaire66 on June 25, 2006 at 11:11 PM | link to this | reply

Keep on haiku-ing!

posted by Decshak_ on June 23, 2006 at 6:48 PM | link to this | reply

Excellent haiku, YPunday. And I agree with swftfox, haiku isn't haiku

if it doesn't follow the traditional syllable count.

posted by saul_relative on June 21, 2006 at 1:22 AM | link to this | reply

Every season has its blooms and its droops, I guess

posted by Straightforward on June 19, 2006 at 7:17 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks for you lovely haiku and the nice comment you left in my blog.

posted by Passionflower on June 19, 2006 at 2:31 PM | link to this | reply

Hello yPunday! Tried to email you but it is blocked!

I wanted to thank you for your kind words and tell you to keep checking as I had to all my blogs on almost a nightly basis! See you around and look forward to reading more of yours!

posted by swftfox on June 18, 2006 at 8:52 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks for sharing Brisbane...

For the last few years, I seem just a tad too serious. I keep asking about mortality, the spiritual, life... perhaps death is a way to answer the question: Is there meaning in all this birthing and dying? I seem to be edging to the possible explanation that in this unbroken circle, human understanding, intuition, religion are just another form of Creator and Creature enjoying Creation. Shalom! Punster Punday

posted by salem8 on June 18, 2006 at 4:45 PM | link to this | reply

my dad died

around about the same time too!

strange coincidence

posted by brisbane_artist on June 18, 2006 at 12:54 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks for the heads up, haiku lover

 will look at it again, and make adjustments while keeping the intent. Have a lovely day.

posted by salem8 on June 18, 2006 at 3:12 AM | link to this | reply

VERY NICE! I like your explanation in your description too.

Someone was complaining that nobody explains to him what haiku is but everywhere (including mine) I see wonderful explanations! I really dont care for "American" haiku with wrong syllable count, as I believe it is for people who simply can't write real haiku. Yours is very nice, but one tiny thing that I have done occasionally.....you have six syllable in the first line!

posted by swftfox on June 17, 2006 at 8:38 PM | link to this | reply