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Brettnik--- I'm looking forward to your next post.

posted by Jazwolf on April 14, 2006 at 6:43 PM | link to this | reply

Brettnik: I think we all have stories like that...

secret thoughts of "what if." 

They are quite haunting...and they never really leave, do that?

posted by Captain_Gulliver on April 13, 2006 at 10:13 AM | link to this | reply

Brettnik,

Could be.

posted by Blanche. on April 12, 2006 at 5:32 PM | link to this | reply

Blanche--amazing and maybe a little creepy!

posted by brettnik on April 12, 2006 at 5:30 PM | link to this | reply

Brettnik,

Great insight in the last line, isn't it amazing how familiar faces turn up?

posted by Blanche. on April 12, 2006 at 3:51 PM | link to this | reply

I am with comment of Una1- great line!!!

posted by shypettite on April 11, 2006 at 7:25 PM | link to this | reply

Interesting...

 guess I will wait for more too...

posted by FactorFiction on April 10, 2006 at 1:13 PM | link to this | reply

Sannhet

When I get the two separate stories fleshed out, I'll post them!  Thanks for the encouragement!

posted by brettnik on April 9, 2006 at 8:40 PM | link to this | reply

Brettnik -

Great stuff! I want to read more! And I know there is more this time because of the other comments.

posted by sannhet on April 9, 2006 at 7:37 PM | link to this | reply

Jazwolf

That's so weird...I actually thought about the fact that there are two stories as I wrote it.  I have enough developmental material for both stories to be longer and more fleshed out.  There's much more to the bully story and to the love story.  I will revisit them and send them to you when I finish!  Thanks!

posted by brettnik on April 7, 2006 at 12:11 PM | link to this | reply

Brettnik--- Great story. Stories, actually, If I may be so bold, you have

two distinct stories here. (And two posts!) Impact of the latter one (John) could be greatly enhanced by starting with entrance into the garage. Wonderful ending. Of course, all of this is not to say that what you have is not good as is. It is. I like your work and just wanted to give you something to think about.

posted by Jazwolf on April 7, 2006 at 9:28 AM | link to this | reply

Una1

I love the line, "Love that's based on imagination more than understanding."  Beautiful!

posted by brettnik on April 7, 2006 at 4:15 AM | link to this | reply

This story stirrs my childhood memory.

Love in its purest form. Love that comes and goes easy. Love that's based on imagination more than understanding. I miss childhood love!

This is a story I wish I were able to write!

posted by una01 on April 6, 2006 at 9:16 PM | link to this | reply

Nanaroo

Thanks a bunch!

posted by brettnik on April 6, 2006 at 6:30 PM | link to this | reply

brettnik

oh!!!  so nice!

posted by Nanaroo on April 6, 2006 at 6:23 PM | link to this | reply

TAPS

Thank you so much!  That's a story I've wanted to get out for a long time.

posted by brettnik on April 6, 2006 at 6:19 PM | link to this | reply

brettnik

You write so well.   It is very engrossing.

posted by TAPS. on April 6, 2006 at 5:08 PM | link to this | reply