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I just found the "a" I dropped...

posted by muser on January 13, 2006 at 4:52 AM | link to this | reply

I like yours better,Ebb. I cannot seem to get away from the iambic...

for one thing. More importantly, we both are thinking of freedom, although my verse  speaks of spontaneity and naievte bordering on irresponsibility whereas yours has great purpose, and high mindedness...and has an underlying message of intent to protect such freedom.  The quatrains of the grasshopper and the ant have been submitted! LOL!  I most grciously  concede the third quatrain to you... with firm insistence.

posted by muser on January 13, 2006 at 4:48 AM | link to this | reply

So far it's just us two, muser...

and since I can't sleep tonight... I guess I'll Blog.  Here's my third stanza:

For from within the soul freedom flies forth,

Unfettered by feckless and vapid lies,

Certain of its vision and its great worth,

Solving the cruxes, wherefores and the whys.

 

posted by Ebb.and.Flow on January 13, 2006 at 2:54 AM | link to this | reply

Ebb, are we going to be the only two participants again? 3rd Quatrain?

Let's not make any plans before we leave;
like falling leaves upon the wind we'll wend.
Agreeably this might be quite  naive,
but we could dance tonight at rainbow's end.

posted by muser on January 12, 2006 at 8:03 PM | link to this | reply