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Kris, if I didn't have words to work it through I'd probably blow up.
This was very powerful for me to write, too, because it has literal and metaphorical layers to it. The glass being the surface of something I thought was, but finding something else in it's destruction. To put a part of it in the most simplistic terms. Thank you for the compliments on the wording and the images. I like to know what people find strong. But, really, when writing like this, it just flows without much though from somewhere deep inside....and sometimes from just somewhere else altogether. I have part of an email for you. :) Hope you're well.
posted by
Temple
on July 24, 2005 at 12:34 PM
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Temple
I love glass, the beauty and smoothness of it....just the imagery of cracks across it on top of an image was strong enough to make me cringe...melting you from inside was another strong image....I really loved the power of the words in this one...sad, but beautifully done...glad to see you working with the words to work it through..
posted by
Krisles
on July 24, 2005 at 11:37 AM
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lol, strat...
I understand, thank you very much. :)
posted by
Temple
on July 22, 2005 at 3:47 PM
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Arrgghh, wrong conjunction!
"And" is what I am looking for, not "but." Sorry. I did like it, AND(not but) I was trying to relay my reactions as well as my overall impression.
Sorry for the confusion.
posted by
strat
on July 22, 2005 at 2:23 PM
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strat
Thanks for the great descriptions, or at least I think they were great in your mind. The use of the word "but" before very well done makes me wonder if you liked it, so I'm not sure if you were offering a critique....but it's an emotional and painful subject, so it will of course reflect that. I liked the descriptions though, and very well done can't be bad....so thank you. :)
posted by
Temple
on July 22, 2005 at 2:18 PM
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Very well done, Temple.
Visceral is a word that comes to mind. Wrenching, even. But very well done.
posted by
strat
on July 22, 2005 at 1:21 PM
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sweet symphony
thank you so much....sometimes it's easier when they have consumed you at some point to give them life
posted by
Temple
on July 22, 2005 at 4:41 AM
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Wow wow wow wow wow
you have such a splendid way with words.....well done the emotion was captured deeply....
posted by
_Symphony_
on July 22, 2005 at 4:37 AM
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little ms.
sadness that lives with me.....deep....yes....
posted by
Temple
on July 22, 2005 at 3:47 AM
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oh, so sad....
posted by
littlemspickles
on July 22, 2005 at 2:01 AM
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temple
Well you're welcome...and thank you too! I just really don't think that poetry is "my thang." I used to have a whole blog full of it if you can imagine! I think some of it is up at blog spot. Good thing no one reads stuff there!
posted by
Holy_Grail
on July 21, 2005 at 8:25 PM
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shoot..
and I meant to say, thank you...:)
posted by
Temple
on July 21, 2005 at 8:22 PM
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HG, you are always so hard on yourself!
First, you're beautiful, so hush. Second, it took me years to find a style of poetry I really liked. It helps to read a lot of it. All writers pick things up from other writers, it's just the way it's done. All the sudden, this style started working. My old stuff I like, also, but not as much as what I've written in "no mercy." If you just write and read things you like, with no expectations, you could totally find a grove. You write very well. :)
posted by
Temple
on July 21, 2005 at 8:21 PM
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temple
I could really relate to that poem. Sad, but nicely done as always! I wish I could write poetry, but then I also wish I could be tall and skinny with blue eyes!
posted by
Holy_Grail
on July 21, 2005 at 8:11 PM
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Mapet, I don't write with any formal structure or intention...
I write metaphorically often times specifically because, well, my brain thinks that way, and also because part of the beauty of poetry can leave certain things totally up to interpretation. So, I can say it, but nobody really has to know what I'm saying, and they have their own experience of it. In this case, however, most people here know that I just recently broke up with someone who also blogs here...beyond that I'd like to leave the meaning up to the reader. My poetry comes from inside, there's no conscious thought -- not usually -- just emotion straight to virtual paper. I'd say it's safe to say that yes, there is definitely loneliness represented here, though.
posted by
Temple
on July 21, 2005 at 6:29 PM
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Temple
I didn't know you wrote poetry. I love poetry. I had a blog here for awhile but it wasn't getting much love so had to move on. I like this one, I like the distinct opposites in each stanza. You really sound lonely...was that your intention?
posted by
Mapet6
on July 21, 2005 at 6:20 PM
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Hi Vane
All these new faces....it's wonderful. Thank you very much for such kind words and for taking the time to read. I'm glad you liked it.
posted by
Temple
on July 21, 2005 at 5:01 PM
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Temple
Military Wife is right. that's exactly how I felt after finishing.
posted by
Vanidad
on July 21, 2005 at 4:38 PM
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Military Wife
Wow, thank you..that's a very cool compliment. Thank you for reading and leaving a footprint here. :)
posted by
Temple
on July 19, 2005 at 10:17 PM
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amazing. I love when a poem leaves me holding my breath to the end, the same as a suspense filled novel can.
posted by
Bel_
on July 19, 2005 at 10:05 PM
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