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Good quatrain!!

Mystic

This is very good!  Why don't we make that the first quatrain of SONNET III?  What do you think?

Now try the couplet.  Couplets are easy once you get the knack. 

posted by Ebb.and.Flow on June 23, 2005 at 8:32 PM | link to this | reply

Ebb

i think i did it:-) let me know: Never done a sonnet in my lifeYou and Muser have challenged me to stretch myself...thanks, kinda like Justsouno with the bible quiz

I surrender, I pull back, I give me

where are we going, will i know regret

this is truly not myself I now see

laughter, loving, playing, then i will fret.

posted by MysticGmekeepr on June 23, 2005 at 8:07 PM | link to this | reply

sonnet input is great... keep it coming

mask

I was just excited that you wrote them!  I am happy to include them.

mystic

just add your ideas like you are... I'll work out the format...

 

posted by Ebb.and.Flow on June 23, 2005 at 7:51 PM | link to this | reply

Ebb

Thank you, dear friend, for penning my words.  ~~curtsey~~bow~~smile

posted by behindamask on June 23, 2005 at 11:29 AM | link to this | reply

Ebb

"seek the lilac"...within a dream

I just added a couple words to Muser's creative thought. I refrain from more input as I don't know the sonnet format and would mess you all up :-) I'm not an educated poet, rather a muse directed one, and my particular muse isn't a stickler for detail, actually she can be kind of loose ended:-)

posted by MysticGmekeepr on June 23, 2005 at 9:05 AM | link to this | reply

O.K., I got ahead of myself...next three lines...

Then suddenly you throw the covers back
Oh no! What have I done? I hear you scream
You dress, hair wild, saying, "Seek the lilac..."

posted by muser on June 23, 2005 at 1:27 AM | link to this | reply

I like the new direction, muser... BUT...

don't forget that we need to have end rhymes that are EFEF...   gotta stay true to the sonnet form!

I'm a stickler for detail.

 

posted by Ebb.and.Flow on June 23, 2005 at 12:34 AM | link to this | reply

next three lines? how about...

Then suddenly you throw the covers back
Oh no! What have I done? I hear you scream
You dress, look back, and say don't follow me...

posted by muser on June 23, 2005 at 12:17 AM | link to this | reply