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Rusades

Haha ...this isn't a novel I plan on publishing...not without going back and rewriting it with the details and narratives. Bloggers don't read fiction on here unless it's sharp, percise, short & simple.

This is more or less an outline for a novel plan on writing in the future. =)

But thanks for reading and for the advice. I wish I had written 4 books...lol....I'm still working on a novel I started more than a year ago...and I'm only on page 30...hehe....what's your secret?

posted by MiaElla on January 26, 2005 at 7:15 AM | link to this | reply

Obsessions in Dialogue

The majority of content is full of wit, vibrance, themes of sexual tensions (The latter your obvious strength.)  Did notice your work lacked narratives, descriptives.  A reader needs as much of what the mood or setting can offer as well.

Perhaps maybe attempt to break of the dialogue a bit more.  Even things out.  Page after page of dialogue can tend to seem like banter.  Personally I enjoyed it.  I'm working on my fourth novel as of now.  Took me a long time to learn these things on my own.  My comments are only in appreciation for our similiar interest.

Rusades

(BURDENS- fiction)

posted by Rusades on January 25, 2005 at 7:29 PM | link to this | reply

Witchflower

Hey you switched stories on me...do you like this fiction piece better? Thanks for visiting.

posted by MiaElla on January 13, 2005 at 10:11 AM | link to this | reply

Mia, this is great!

I love the way you write less rather than more.  Very compelling. 

posted by Witchflower on January 13, 2005 at 10:08 AM | link to this | reply

Mia - what can I say? I'm a damn good editor! Hell, I get paid for watching for mistakes! ;-)

posted by roofpig on January 12, 2005 at 11:15 AM | link to this | reply

roofpig

Dang-it, you're too quick...I was hoping it would be fixed before you read it....lol....I'm going to have to read it thrice before you do....and before I post it. LMAO.

posted by MiaElla on January 12, 2005 at 11:12 AM | link to this | reply

Ooo, the foot is on the other shoe now!

Oh, and "That's right, her husband." should be "That's right, YOUR husband."  Just thought you should know!  :-)

posted by roofpig on January 12, 2005 at 11:04 AM | link to this | reply