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Kelli, lol. You are no monster, ha.

I have always liked your poetry, anyway.   Okay, I will check it out.

posted by Tremac on October 10, 2004 at 10:32 AM | link to this | reply

Tremacc, really, I AM A MONSTER NOW, I WROTE A WHOLE POEM

and posted it and I said you inspired it!!!

posted by Kelli on October 9, 2004 at 11:44 PM | link to this | reply

Pretty good haiku, Kelli

   I like, I like...

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 9:42 PM | link to this | reply

oh, i'm a monster...................

Never revealing

my addictive behavior.

Sneaking back to try.

posted by Kelli on October 9, 2004 at 9:33 PM | link to this | reply

My thought when I wrote that last line was basically about thriving off of my own progression or progressive steps, hitting my stride with the determination to keep it... if that helps at all.  Anyway, I'm a bit twisted so maybe you have to have be a little bit twisted to get me.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 9:26 PM | link to this | reply

I can't quite grasp the last line

what does that say about me I wonder.

posted by beachbelle on October 9, 2004 at 9:09 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks Kelli.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 9:04 PM | link to this | reply

Reading your poems

amazed at the rythym here

Yes! Think I'll return!

I DID IT, but now I'm going to have a problem NOT doing it!!!

posted by Kelli on October 9, 2004 at 8:52 PM | link to this | reply

Hello Kelli. Scribey did? Well! He is always full of surprises.

Thank you Kelli for visiting me.   I hope you get a chance to check back on some of my past haiku.   Maybe you will find something that strikes a chord.   I look forward to your feedback.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 8:46 PM | link to this | reply

Much appreciated Holy G, you rock as always

and I miss your antithesis haiku.  Funny stuff.      Thanks and feel free to drop a line anytime.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 8:42 PM | link to this | reply

very very very interesting.....................

Scriber suggested I visit, I'll have to thank him, and visit more often!

posted by Kelli on October 9, 2004 at 8:41 PM | link to this | reply

tremacc

Very nice, and in keeping with your always positive and inspirational haiku. Here's my version, the antithesis on this rainy, "blah" night:

Sitting on my ass

Getting lazy and stagnant

In mind and body.    

 

posted by Holy_Grail on October 9, 2004 at 8:26 PM | link to this | reply

Thank you, Laroux. You have made my day.

I appreciate you.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 7:54 PM | link to this | reply

I read your words - take a deep breath with eyes closed - pause - and continue with my day. thank you !!!

posted by Laroux on October 9, 2004 at 7:50 PM | link to this | reply

Hello Thomas, if that is your preference, you can if you so choose.

Please, be my guest.   Thanks for reading.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 6:00 PM | link to this | reply

Symphony. Thank you.

I did have a fun day, but not as fun as yours.   I will try harder next time.

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 5:58 PM | link to this | reply

Are you not supposed to reply to a Haiku with a Tanka? Tanka pattern 5,7,5,7,7..?

posted by ThomasFranklin on October 9, 2004 at 10:39 AM | link to this | reply

great as always..................hope you are ok..well I actually

all ready know you are ok........so have a lovely weekend...and get out and enjoy yourself..........

posted by _Symphony_ on October 9, 2004 at 8:50 AM | link to this | reply

Ahhh, Red. Thank you.

Sometimes you've gotta put the pedal to the medal, ya know?   I appreciate your feedback and for reading me. 

posted by Tremac on October 9, 2004 at 8:06 AM | link to this | reply

aaaaahhhh action, this is good, real good tremacc

 red

posted by redlunar on October 9, 2004 at 7:26 AM | link to this | reply