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Thanks Cass88

'Appreciate u reading and highlighting my best line.Deo

posted by salem8 on June 13, 2004 at 1:18 PM | link to this | reply

I love the line "the marrow of the night". Its one of those repeatable lines that will flow thru my head. What a great description.

posted by Ca88andra on June 12, 2004 at 2:04 AM | link to this | reply

Faranya and other sonnet lovers... edited version up

I worked again on this sonnet today and the lines are closer to Shakespeare's meter. Let me know if u agree/not

posted by salem8 on June 11, 2004 at 9:48 PM | link to this | reply

Apologies to those who could not get to my email

A certain leprechuan named SUESS has invaded my mailbox and has had many suitors write me instead of her. Until I send them off to their un-merry spouses, email is, regrettably, slower than my usual "punctual efficiecy".

posted by salem8 on June 10, 2004 at 8:17 PM | link to this | reply

I dd ot work on the meter; stressed & unaccented syllables NOT easy4me

I could have stuck with 12 syllables, close enough to everyday rhythms of speech, but I wanted certain words in for impact: "Proclaiming a monotheistic truth," for instance. Thanks for reminding me that I may also find myself through BLoGGING. Dr Suess/Suess may approve of that!

posted by salem8 on June 10, 2004 at 8:14 PM | link to this | reply

Hi Punster!

I always enjoy reading other writers' sonnets. I find the English form a bit more user-friendly. This one reminds us that it's best not to search too hard online for a perfect world, because it's not necessarily going to be there. Yet we do live in hope and can plunge into the "marrow of the night" with a mouse-click and find ... what? Maybe love at the other end. Maybe just friendship, or reassurance. Maybe, in some way, we can even find ourselves when others tell us how we affect them. Good read! ~ faranya

posted by faranya on June 10, 2004 at 9:57 AM | link to this | reply

I love you Sue

but I am a woman toooh!

posted by salem8 on June 9, 2004 at 12:13 PM | link to this | reply

OK..........Keep your privacy, heavy head........

posted by 9STAR on June 9, 2004 at 12:12 PM | link to this | reply

Thanks for reading, Sue. Sonnets are a vehicle...

that I prefer. Most of my writing runs between 14-20 lines. Trem's haiku are exercises in brevity, not too easy to do well. Your writing has feelings, mine combines form with existential isuues.BTW Bbelle did not enjoy that someone blew her cover... it's good to keep some privacy on Blogit or on the Net, generally. Peace out!

posted by salem8 on June 9, 2004 at 11:59 AM | link to this | reply

hey punster..........

great style............and crazy you.........I am kidding.

posted by 9STAR on June 8, 2004 at 10:31 PM | link to this | reply